A Frightening Experience - draft 1
Frightening experiences make people impressive. When I was 13, I went home from cram school by bicycle. I was ready to cross the road, all of sudden, I was hit by a car driven by a military man and I felt myself flying in the air. At the moment, many pictures flashed through my mind, such as memories in my childhood or in junior high school, and so on. I felt my body was soft and did not belong to me. I even thought everything was over including my family, my friends, and my bright future. Fortunately, I did not hurt seriously, there were just some wounds on my skin. This experience warned me that it was necessary to be cautious about crossing every road because traffic lights were a sign to let people observe.

7 Comments:
At 7:21 AM,
傻咩 said…
喔呵呵~我是第一個~~
I was hit by a car driven by a military man 這邊用兩個by小人我是覺得怪怪的= =不知您~覺不覺得阿~
At 7:50 AM,
Butterfly said…
1.I was ready to cross the road, 我覺得這邊可以斷句,下一句重新開始 all of sudden,I was hit by a car driven by a military man and I felt myself flying in the air.
2.many pictures flashed through my mind, such as memories in my childhood or in junior high school, and so on.我覺得such as前面不用逗號啦,而且後面我覺得such as the memories of my childhood and my junior high school,and so on
3.I did not hurt seriously, there were just some wounds on my skin.那個I didn't got hurt
At 8:05 AM,
許雅婷 said…
I was ready to cross the road, all of sudden, I was hit by a car driven by a military man and I felt myself flying in the air. 這句有點長
At 9:45 AM,
Samantha*霓∥ said…
all of sudden, I was >>是all of a sudden吧?
好驚險 這段故事我有聽你說過
At 11:03 PM,
Celia said…
I "did not hurt" seriously, there were just some wounds on my skin.應該是did not get hurt。
At 4:40 AM,
FawnYma said…
1.all of "a" sudden
2.I even thought everything was over","including my family
3.it was necessary to be cautious "when" crossing
At 6:38 AM,
Tina said…
all of "a" sudden
did not "get" hurt
","including
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